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Fiction Extermination of the Fimir

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  • The [translated as ‘Old Ones’] landed three days ago. Our scientists theorize they have [translated as ‘sky-ships’] capable of moving through the atmosphere at great speeds. First contact was made by our enemies [translation- ‘shaggoths’]. Reports of a monumental city is sprouting up from within the equatorial jungle.
  • Our delegation was met with indifference upon arrival, though a thriving trade has begun between equatorial cities and our otherworldly visitors. Numerous resources are now being dredged up by their slaves. Our ambassadors report the resources are being exchanged for devices of great power. More disturbingly, our ambassadors also report that the [old ones] are conducting scientific and genetic experimentation on much of the planets flora and fauna, particularly on the crocodilian and saurian creatures of the jungles. Rumors of experimentation on captured [fimir] remain unsubstantiated.
  • Reports of epidemics have erupted from all of our population centers in the wake of the [old ones] grand tour of our major cities. Our more conservative government factions blame the visitors, however our scientists have been unable to establish a direct link between the [old ones] and the pathogens. The medical experts do admit both the outbreaks and the atmospheric temperature anomalies coincide with the alien arrival to the planet.
  • Our capitol city and our two largest industrial centers have been devastated in the wake of the surprise attacks by [old one] weaponry. Most of our central government officials were evacuated in time, though the fate of our ambassadors in the [old one] city is still unknown since communcation was lost with our trading enclaves. Our military is currently mobilizing and deploying between the midline cities and the equatorial jungles.
  • The decades-long armistice between our civilization and the [shaggoths] is over. They have been equipped with [old one] weaponry powered by unknown magical energies. Our forward military armies have been defeated, and the mid-zone cities have been all but overrun.
  • Scientists have confirmed that the legions of [saurian] creatures that have overrun our land forces are the result of the genetic experiments conducted within the [old one] laboratories. They hold the original genetic structure of their base terrestrial creatures, though refined and altered to an alarming degree of sophistication. It appears some [fimir] genetic material was used in their creation, though drastically altered. The [old ones] have also uplifted members of certain mammalian species that they are now breeding for some unknown purpose.
  • All contact has been lost with the eastern cities. Our frontline has disintegrated, as the [old ones] have now set up a network of nodes within each of our cities and seem able to teleport their forces directly into the hearts of our own population centers. Our government is fractured, with regional control now held directly by the military.
  • Scientists believe the [old ones] are using a previously-unknown source of energy to power their weapons. The energy appears nearly infinite in scope, almost magical by nature, and is being channeled into the planet from an “immaterial” realm. The power is channeled through use of tremendous [gates] located on the poles of the planet. How they are able to harness this power is a mystery.
  • The average global temperature has risen by nearly 12 degrees, resulting in the rising of the ocean levels. This has precipitated the melting of the planetary polar ice caps. Our draconic allies fled in the wake of the collapse of our cities, and have retreated to the mountains in the north where the temperature is still at its much lower pre-invasion levels. Our scouts report that the [old ones] have also turned upon their [shaggoth] allies and rendered them all but extinct.
  • The last series of plagues has rendered our own population effectively sterile. No solutions have been proposed by our scientific community as of yet.
  • Degenerates within our ranks have discovered means to repopulate our species numbers by impregnating captured members of the [old ones] experimental mammalian races. These practices are widely condemned by our surviving governments but have not been effectively stamped out.
  • In the wake of the recent massive earthquakes and upheavals, we have received the report the [old ones] have fractured the continent into two halves. All effective resistance has collapsed, with our armies and remaining settlements being destroyed in the [saurian] extermination purges. Survivors have fled our strongholds and are attempting to survive in hideouts across the globe, most within swamplands.
  • Our remaining scientists have issued a final alarming report on the state of the immaterial realm. The magical realm seems to have become increasingly convoluted and corrupted since the invasion has begun, to include manifesting signs of intelligence (and malignance) in the material realm. The report states this is due to the rampant warfare, disease, unbridled change, and even the hedonism in our own ranks that has devastated the planet. The report ends that if this corruption continues unchecked, it could bring about another cataclysm. Due to the destruction of our civilization at the hands of the [old ones] it is unlikely such a cataclysm will be able to be stopped…

Excerpts translated from journal entries recently recovered from the “Sour Sea Scrolls,” obviously the works of some highly-imaginative forgers and wordsmiths out of Marienburg. Currently kept in the Nuln archives under “fiction.” – Chronicler Wigbert Weiskropf, Nuln Archivist


Repost from the April-May 2019 Short Story Contest, my entry.
 
You got one of my votes. As I said in my review, this isn't the first short story in this format I read here but I think this was the best one.
 
You got one of my votes. As I said in my review, this isn't the first short story in this format I read here but I think this was the best one.

I am honored! I enjoyed writing this one, came as a bit of a flash of inspiration when I was doing research on the arrival of the Spanish into the New World, and how diseases wreaked havoc on the native populations simultaneously with the conquistadors marching around hunting resources. Got me thinking of how an alien invasion might go along similar lines, and that led me to this "rebranding" of some of the old Warhammer lore.
 
Reposted story reviews from the contest thread:

Once again some exceptional entries! Something I've really enjoyed this time is that due to the excellent theme provided by @Y'ttar Scaletail, all the stories are filled with grimdark, Rogue One-esque goodness, with hero mortality aplenty. Now, onto my reviews:

Story 7: Of all the stories in this contest, and indeed any other contest entry I've read so far, this one is by far the most unique. Rather than a regular prose story, this one is essentially a collection of journal notes from a scroll in the archives or Marienburg, as if we're the ones who have gone to these archives, taken this scroll off the shelf and started to read them. It isn't clear who the writer is (although it's talking about the Old Ones as an enemy, so it could be the Fimir given the title), but the subject is the Old Ones' conquest of the Warhammer World and their subsequent modifications to it to make it more habitable for their own creations to live in. How on Earth any man of the Empire would know of such events is beyond me, or how men of the Empire could have obtained Fimir writings, but this is still an interesting read. It even starts some rumours of new Warhammer Fantasy theories (that the Fimir, or whoever wrote the records, could have caused the manifestations of the Chaos Gods, and that the Saurus' gene pool actually came from the Fimir) - I don't know if these are true, but it would be fun to find out!

Story Seven “The Extermination of the Fimir”: Fairly often, we get pieces that paint the Lizardmen as villains, but this one. Wow, just wow. This piece not only made the Lizardmen the bad guys but it made Fimir seem like good things. It is one thing to make Fimir relatable but to make them seem like good guys is a bold move. Fimir aren’t just bad guys, they are deplorable bad guys. Another bold move is the unorthodox structure of this story. We’ve had pieces that have been submitted in a similar format before but this piece was my all-time favorite non-traditional short story. Why? Because despite its unorthodox form it was structured like a short story with an introduction, build up, climax, resolution and twist ending.

Like most of the pieces in this contest, my misgivings are small. I think this piece could have used a bit more editing. Also, I belive the commentary of obviously the works of some highly-imaginative forgers and wordsmiths out of Marienburg might have been more effective if placed at the end, not the beginning of this piece.

Everyone was doomed, the piece had sympathic villains, and it involved an unusual take on Fimir which is one of my favorite things. This is a strong contender for the Scalenex Cup.

Woo!

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“The Extermination of the Fimir”

I really like the unorthodox structure of this, and yet it still flows and reads like a normal story. What I adore even more about this story is that despite the monotone tone of the bullet point structure, and the overall word choice, it was still evocative and tense. Bullet point by bullet point, the reader can see the Fimir’s civilization slowly degrade over the course of this unorthodox story, and can’t help but feel sorrow for them (or schadenfreude?). They’re usually considered the worst of the worst, yet with this monotone story, we can understand why they would see Chaos, the upcoming cataclysm they’ve foreseen, as saviors and liberators. This then can justify the incessant yearning the Fimir have for the attention of the Chaos gods throughout Warhammer Fantasy fluff (or am I stating the obvious?).


Wow. Well done, anonymous writer, well done!


Sadly, I also have no nitpicks for this too.

THE EXTERMINATION OF THE FIMIR
i was lying as this has been already said. If the introduction would have been put as ending, it would have been perfect.
Other than that, a very good story.

*arising from a billowing cloud of smoke laced with lightning*

YOU DARE TO POKE ME!? YOU DARE TO INVOKE THE CRITIQUER OF SHORT STORIES, THE OVERANALYSER OF JOKES, THE CHOSEN HERALD OF SHOAD N'TEZL?

VERY WELL. PREPARE YOURSELF, MORTAL, FOR A TRUE TEST OF SANITY. BEHOLD:

THE CRITIQUE ....OF DOOOOOM!


7. The Extermination of the Fimir

I, Bane of Pitchfork Dot Com, imply this story to be a Cool Addition to the Lore. This is a history, rather than a conventional narrative with characters, but histories are stories too. This one has well-explored themes of colonialism and conquest that superbly mirror those we already know from the Lizardmen universe as well as from the real world (hint: Fimir=Native American). This extra chapter of the history adds an interesting level to the cyclic rise-and-fall of global power that is so characteristic of warhammer lore. As such, it is a realistic and eye-opening approach to the idea of Doom.

Thy Doom Is Pronounced: This story is destined to begin a lot of sentences with "well, actually".

So as it’s very late and most of what I would say have already been said, from the depths of the ongoing Moulder Pitfighting campaign I have dragged the insane Skaven Vampire Hissk (formerly Assassin Grrzzzik) across worlds to read these stories and react...

Story Seven:

Hissk: Feemeer? No-no Hissk never scent-heard of them. Almost remind Hissk of creepy-thing boss Mailill, though Hissk no-think Mailill even ex-exists. Feemeer use-use big word-things, Hissk thinks he no like Feemeer. Seem too clever-smart for own good-good. Old-things maybe do good-good, though Hissk no like them too.



Conclusions:

Hissk: Hissk no know why Hissk brought here and made to stare-stare at evil-bad word-things, Hissk hate-hates word-things. At least some scale-things and other-things die-died, make-makes Hissk feel bit better. Am thirsty now. I hunger...Hissk hungers...*Hiss*

Y'ttar: In all this was another amazing and hard fought story compy. A lot of expertly written pieces that easily rival (or dare I say surpass) GW’s own BL works and their other material. Kudos to all, specially Scalenex for running these competitions! :D

I appreciate all the reviews, and I totally agree that the excerpt should have gone at the end! It fits so much better there. I will try to get in my own reviews next contest.
 
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