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Seraphon summary: Kingdom of Nezoa.

In this land, the Old Ones made the Slann rule over the Seraphon. The Slann were told they should rule this land in the name of the Old Ones, and that every thousand years a new spawning pool has to be made by the Slann. The Slann, with the help of the Old Ones, made the first spawning pool. The Lizardmen that came out with the Slann managed to make a society and a good army to defend themselves against Skaven, demons, etc., but through the wars they fought, the Slann died and the spawning pool could not be made. The Old Ones died as well to the Chaos gods. Only the Skink priests, who have some of the teachings of the Slann, wrote it down, and the Slann left some books for if they died.

Some of the priests decided to get all the remaining Seraphon and make a new spawning pool. Only it was not complete and they made mistakes. When it was made, it was blood red, and the Skinks that came out had red hawks. The first Skink was very tall. Then, the priests decided to trap the spawning pool in a jungle. The first one decided to live there for about 20 years. Then, when he was exploring, he found the books of the Slann and their teachings. Then, he found the staff of Lord Mazdamundi. When he picked up the staff, he heard, "Your people need you to go to the spawning pool and take my orb with you and make a cloak with the leaves of this jungle." "Alright, I know what to do," he made a cloak, took the orb of Lord Mazdamundi, went to the pool, and managed to get some land on a gold lump with tons of gold. The other Seraphon gave him some gold, and he became the leader of their army.

They managed to ally with the other kingdom and helped defeat daemons and Skaven. He taught the teaching that he found to the other priests, and a discovery squad was made to discover and scout the land and find temples. The army managed to defeat an army of Skaven and daemons at the same time.

Chapter 1: Saurus

One day, Slann and the priests decided to make a new spawning pool, but when they were making it, an army of Skaven attacked, and a drop of blood from the priest Kixi take the diviner was dropped into the holy water that was used in the pool. As normal, the pool turned red, but mixed with blue, and the first thing that came out of it was a Saurus, but not a normal one, a large one. The muscles on it were so strong he needed rings around its tail and a rhino helmet, and a giant belt with armor attached to it. From the moment it was born, it was made to fight.

And out of that spawning pool came a Saurus, and he managed to hold the Skaven off enough time to get the Saurus battle ready and fight the Skaven off. What happens next, you see in the next chapter.

Chapter 2: Hunt, Kill, Loot

Whilst searching for temples to explore, they found the swamp of the orcs. They were not welcome there and were chased out of there. After Kixi and Klaq got back, Kixi said, "Hey, Klaq, we need to talk. I am getting scared when we are going exploring. Maybe we should make a crew to be safer and find more. Check the army branches for candidates."

Klaq went to work, he found a few candidates for the crew: Huachi, Otapl, Xepic, and Tok. He went to Kixi, and he told me the names are perfect for the crew, and I have a name for the Star Blood Stalkers. "Great!" said Kixi, "let's tell them about it and if they want to be a part of it." After they said yes and wanted to be a part of the crew, they held a meeting to tell them what they were needed for.

"Hello, Otapl, Tok, Huachi, Klaq-took, Xepic, you all have been summoned to be my bodyguards and help me fight or make decisions and guard me at all costs. You shall now return to your branches, and when your service is needed, you will be brought to me. Understood?" questions Kixi.

Everyone replied, "No, we understand and want to help."

After some time passed, they were called to Kixi Taka, the diviner, for a mission.

Xepic asked, "What is the mission?"

Kixi Taka replied, "We are gonna search for temples for teachings that they left there. Let's go!"

The Star Blood Stalkers went into the jungle in secret, and after a few hours of searching, they found a temple belonging to Xen'phantica. They found his books and what he left there and took them back to the vault where all the found teachings are stored and saved. "Alright," said Kixi, "you have all done a splendid job. This is one of the uses of the crew and to protect me, of course. Get back to your branches and make me proud. Yes, my lord." They went to their branches. Kixi called for Taktak'rillo to look at the new teachings they found in the temple.

"Taktak, look at this. The Star Blood Stalkers found this," said Kixi.

Taktak replied, "What books did they find, and what slann did this temple belong to?"

Kixi Taka answered, "The books were from Lord Xen Phantica and his temple. What's wrong, Xen'phantica?"

"Well, before the Redhawks came, and most of the slann was alive, I was serving under him, and we made these books years ago. And I know more. I was his favorite priest. I know how to bring him back to life and more. Kixi, you never had a slann. Why don't you join him?" asked Xen'phantica.

Kixi replied, "No, that will not be possible since I got my priest staff orb and armor from Mazdamundi. If I'm serving a slann, it's him."

Chapter 3: Lord Xen Phantica

"Kixi, we have no time left to spare. Get as many skinks or life as you can get here. We need to sacrifice 300 lives to bring him back," commanded Xen'phantica.

"What 300 lives? Does it matter, Skaven, daemons, orruks, skinks?" asked Kixi.

"No, skinks and saurus, we need those," replied Xen'phantica.

"We do not have that amount of numbers," said Kixi.

"Yes, but then more than half of our armies are dead," replied Xen'phantica.

They summoned the whole army of Nezoa and brought 150 skinks, 120 saurus, 20 kroxigor, and 10 behemoths.

"Who are you two that brought me back here?" "We are Kixi Taka the Divine and Taktak'rillo, Lord Taktak. Taktak, of course, I remember you, and Kixi Taka, I do not know you. This society is falling apart. These are some ground rules you need to do ASAP:

Every month, you go to each spawning pool with one of the strongest Skinks, Saurus, Kroxigors, Stegadon, etc.
We split the army among generals. Every general controls, for example, 1 unit of Skinks and 20 Saurus, and 1 Bastiladon, for example.
When new land is taken, we make a few outposts there and place 2 generals there to build it up into a temple city, all overseen by a Star Priest. Then, when it's finished, we create spawning pools there and make it into a temple city.
These are the most important rules. FOLLOW THEM AT ALL COSTS.

Chapter 4: Bloodborne

Kixi Taka and Taktak were doing their blood sacrifice when, during the Skink blood ritual, a Skink was born where the blood and body were in the pool. The Skink grew muscles more than the rest (in Kixi's mind): "This must be alpha, but why are the eyes red and the hawk's blood red? OH NO, RUN!" Taktak and Kixi were running from the savage Skink when some Chameleon Skinks saw the commotion and prepared their blowpipes. When they saw the 2 priests running and a savage Skink behind them, they shot (non-lethal) and knocked the savage Skink out. When they strapped the Skink to a Kroxigor table, they observed the savage Skink (Taktak'rillo, Kixi Taka, and Lord Xen).

Xen: "What is this type of Skink?"
Kixi: "We don't know. We did our blood ritual, and a Skink was born at that moment and absorbed the body and blood as we dropped it in the pool to be absorbed by the pool. Then it went savage and started chasing us until we found the Chameleon Skinks who knocked him out, and now we are here learning about it."
Xen: "I shall inspect it." (In mind): "This should not be a Skink. It has particles of chaos in it, and it is made for war, perfect for an alpha. Maybe it turns to chaos, not a risk I'm willing to take."

(Back to the mortal realms) "Okay, this thing is suitable for war, but watch out with it. When it turns savage, it will try to kill everything around it, so when it turns wild, all the Skinks or Seraphon that's near it needs to run from it until it's dead or it is killed everything around it."


Chapter 5 them crooked Colonists

Lord Xen called a council of the Seraphon generals to discuss the looming war against the Cities of Sigmar. The generals arrived one by one, each bringing their army and advisors to the council. Kixi Taka and Taktak'Rillo were among them, along with the Star Priest and Skink Priest, who had been studying the savage skink discovered in the previous chapter.

Lord Xen stood at the head of the table, surrounded by maps of the region and reports from scouts and spies. "We must prepare ourselves for the coming war," he said, his voice echoing in the council chamber. "The Cities of Sigmar are gathering their armies, and they will not hesitate to strike at us when they are ready."

The other generals murmured in agreement, and Lord Xen continued. "We must fortify our defenses and gather our armies. We will need every skink, saurus, and kroxigor we can muster."

One of the generals spoke up. "What about the beasts? The carnosaurs and stegadons? Will we be using them?"

Lord Xen nodded. "Yes, we will. But we must be careful with them. They are powerful, but also wild and unpredictable. We cannot risk losing control of them in battle."

Kixi Taka raised her hand. "What about the skinks? Will they be fighting as well?"

Lord Xen smiled. "Of course. The skinks are our scouts and skirmishers. They will harass the enemy and soften them up for our heavier units. And the chameleon skinks will be invaluable for their stealth and surprise attacks."

Taktak'Rillo leaned forward. "What of the cities themselves? How will we siege them?"

Lord Xen tapped a spot on the map. "We will strike here, at the city of Hammerhal. It is the largest of the cities and the most heavily defended. But it is also the most vulnerable, as it sits on the edge of the jungle. We will cut off their supply lines and starve them out. And when they are weak and desperate, we will strike."

The council continued late into the night, as the generals discussed strategy and tactics, and the priests conferred on the best ways to harness the power of the stars and the realms. As dawn approached, Lord Xen dismissed the council, and the generals dispersed to their armies to begin their preparations for war.