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Contest Poetry Duel Summer 2023, Vote for your Favorite

Discussion in 'Fluff and Stories' started by Scalenex, Aug 17, 2023.

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Which poem do you like best?

Poll closed Aug 30, 2023.

  1. Poem One: "A Blessing Too Far"

    5 vote(s)
    55.6%

  2. Poem Two: "Lycanthrope Blues"

    4 vote(s)
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  1. Scalenex
    Slann

    Scalenex Keeper of the Indexes Staff Member

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    We only have two poems and you only get one vote, so read these carefully before voting.

    They are fairly short so I recommend multiple readings. For me personally, I think it helps to read them quietly to yourself and then read them out loud.

    A blessing too far

    The sun does broil upon the scorched trees
    Glimmering shafts of bright light seethes
    Even shade offers little respite from heat
    Stones of the temple scorching Skink feet
    A lonely cloud drifts above and on by
    We hoped for rain but it remained dry
    We venerate your blessings, we do so a lot
    But Chotec?... Why did you make it so hot?

    LYCANTHROPE BLUES

    When the chaos moon shines in the dark
    Deep inside me, it ignites a spark
    I can feel as it stirs, right under my skin
    something awakened by that malignant green

    I remember the day, when fate rolled a dice
    bitten by Moulder’s mutated, twisted mice
    the packmaster cried “a new curse you will bear!”
    of the truth of these words, I was not yet aware

    I feel the fur, growing between my scales
    I feel the blood, pumping through my veins
    and I wonder if I am a sort of a new breed
    but the thought is now gone, as I just need to feed

    …
    the scent, the stealth, the chase
    a cry, a shield, a mace
    the blood, the flesh, the taste
    so good, again, with haste
    …

    When I’m again myself, the night has bygone
    but from dusk to dawn, what have i done?
    my scales and my claws are covered by gore
    a child of the Old Ones, I know I’m no more

    As always I think “if I could erase the past…”
    but I laugh at myself, I know the truth at last
    cause I’m addicted to this dream, I’m lucidly insane
    as I now only crave, for the moon to rise again
     
    Scalenex, Aug 17, 2023
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    Slann

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    Two poems, and one of them is mine.
    Well, at least it kinda simplifies my pick. :D
     
    Killer Angel, Aug 17, 2023
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    Two poems, and one of them is also mine.
    Well, at least it kinda simplifies me pick. :p
     
    Y'ttar Scaletail, Aug 17, 2023
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    So it's 1-1 then?... unless someone is being sneaky! :p
     
    NIGHTBRINGER, Aug 17, 2023
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    Poem One: Short and sweet with some very nice vivid and eloquent description. I really enjoyed the humour at the end (very Scaffold/Mike McGear.) Muchly enjoyable and well written! :D

    Poem Two: I think this piece is less a poem and more suited as a (well it is in the title!) Blues piece. The time I mentally added the wailing cry of a harmonica and a warm bass in the background...wow, this piece really came to life! Fantastic work! :D
     
    Y'ttar Scaletail, Aug 23, 2023
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    A worthy duel! :D
     
    Killer Angel, Aug 24, 2023
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    This was a tough choice. Both were good in different ways.

    "A Blessing Too Far" had a more natural rhythm for me when I read it out loud. It had a nice comedic punch and was efficiently written.

    "Lycanthrope Blues" had more evocative imagery and told a very good story.
     
    Scalenex, Aug 29, 2023
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    Well, it had to be a duel and (indeed) it's giving us a lot of entertainment. :)
    It's very close , with such a minimal difference a single vote can still be decisive.
     
    Killer Angel, Aug 29, 2023
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    Killer Angel, Sep 1, 2023
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    Congratulations! And what an exciting back and forth with votes.

    I hope to enter next contest again

    Grrr, !mrahil
     
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    *Verminous chittering laugh cut off by a cry of 'Horned One it's still too hot!'*

    I am impressed how close that was.

    Anyone who is a Blues artist...please have a crack at @Killer Angel's I think it'd work so well as a Blues number. :D
     
    Y'ttar Scaletail, Sep 1, 2023
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    I cannot deny I've tried to give a certain blues' feeling to my poem.
    But your final punchline knocked me down! :p
     
    Killer Angel, Sep 2, 2023
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    ...but in the end, i had my comeback in the short story contest. :p
     
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    Guess who had cast a vote:


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    NIGHTBRINGER, Sep 3, 2023
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    Even read both of the entries and made a legit vote! :)
     
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    Easy come, easy go. I guess it's back to shitposting then... people are more amused with that! :D
     
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    P.S. My vote did make a difference though! :cool:
     
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