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Fiction The Hunger (July-Aug Short Story 2018 entry)

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The Hunger

Taq had always fretted, he had been since he emerged from his spawning pool. Serving under the Skink priest Qra-qutil he had always seen the worst in the plaques, the stars, even the movement of the dust on the ground. For weeks he had dreamt of bloodied maws, hungry yellow eyes, and the laughter of something in the dark. He was but an attendant, so his fears were ignored.

It began when one of the attendants of one of the city’s spawning pools was discovered consuming the bodies of the spawnlings that had died prematurely. The attendant had defended his actions by claiming that it was wasteful to just let the bodies rot. Several of the priests had demanded his death for such an action but others including Taq’s master argued that such a thing was not only efficient but laudable in its conception. Surely the Old Ones intended some use for the dead spawnlings and this seemed the most logical. Taq was not convinced but it was not his place to question his betters.

Several months later Qra-qutil revealed his discovery of a plaque that claimed that the meat of worthy foes and fallen allies were a means to take in their strength and further on the plans of the Old Ones. So by consuming the flesh of the fallen, the eater would gain a measure of knowledge, wisdom, and power from the deceased, a way for the dead to remain a part of the Old Ones’ plans. There had been heated debate between the priests over this discovery. Whilst none dared make the claim that the plaque was a fake, there was an uneasiness. Some questioned if it had been truly translated correctly. There were calls to rouse the city’s sole Mage Priest so that he could shed some light, but Qra-qutil reported that the venerable Slann was too deep in slumber to aid them. Despite the voices against it, the plaque was eventually spoken to the entire city’s population. It was well met.

The number of infirm, crippled, and weak few as they were seemed to disappear over the subsequent weeks. Several of the priests were concerned by this, but others argued that in order to be a strong city the weak links had to be removed. What had befallen these Lustrians remained a mystery to all but the priests, but Taq guessed.

Shortly afterwards the priests that stood against the logic of the plaque and its prophet began to fall ill. They seemed to withdraw from public events and their priestly duties with the other hard-pressed priests led by the heroic Qra-qutil taking up the torch and covering for them. Taq had noticed that the skinks assigned to these absent priests never seemed to appear any more. He had queried Qra-qutil about it but the priest had replied that they were very hard at work caring for their masters.

It had been a trying year for the city. There had been a long heatwave that had decimated much of the jungle’s fruit and droughts that had driven away many of the beasts the Lustrians would hunt. It had been curious how the priests remained well fed, but Taq knew better than to pry. In the city itself, rumours circled how it was no longer safe to wander alone at night, and an increasing number of Skinks and even some Saurus had gone missing. Taq himself had a close encounter with a Saurus whose eyes were filled with hunger, though he had managed to evade the maddened Saurus. When Taq had told Qra-qutil of his close escape, the priest had merely smiled a sharp fanged smile and claimed that Taq was certainly blessed by the Old Ones. Taq found himself avoiding his master more and more.

Eventually nothing was said of the missing priests, and the matter was soon forgotten. The city was no longer a safe place and the gnawed on bones of Lustrians would be discovered more and more. The priests did nothing to abate it.

Taq knew he had to awaken the Slann and rid the city of its curse. But as he entered the temple shrine, he found he was too late. How long the Mage Priest had been dead, Taq could not tell but Qra-qutil and the other priests were still feasting upon his remains. Bloodied maws and glazed yellow eyes turned to regard Taq as he stared in horror.

“Welcome, brother Taq,” Qra-qutil spoke as he rose and wiped a smear of gore from his mouth, “the plaque was right, we have ascended and we shall carry out the will of the Old Ones. Loyal Taq, sup with us.”

Weeks later a contingent from Itza arrived, perturbed by the lengthy silence and the taste of something foul upon the wind. In the city they found its people feasting upon each other, their minds devolved to hunger. All were quickly slain, their bodies burnt upon pyres. Within the temple shrine, the contingent found the partially eaten corpse of a Slann and the bloodied forms of the city’s priests, their throats cut. A solitary plaque, split by a heavy blow lay before the corpses, foul greenish rock once buried inside it now open to the world. Sitting in the centre of the chamber was a lone Skink, his eyes dead and distant.

The Skink only spoke of the hunger and nothing more.
 
Aignor said:
#2 The Hunger:
Dark and well written. A story of corruption and doom. The story flows well and it has a perfect length.
I was a little worried about the flow at the time, so that's good to hear. :)

Scalenex said:
The Hunger:
Scalenex said:
A very poignant and effective horror story all told within less than 1000 words. Very impressive.

My one misgiving is the protagonist, Taq. Taq doesn’t do much. He mainly just witnesses things. A small misgiving in the grand scheme of things. In a classic horror story, even if the protagonist is entirely reactive, they commonly become actors in their own way by desperately struggling to survive. We didn’t see as much as that as I would like.

“Welcome, brother Taq,” Qra-qutil spoke as he rose and wiped a smear of gore from his mouth, “the plaque was right, we have ascended and we shall carry out the will of the Old Ones. Loyal Taq, sup with us.”

We never even found out what he said or did. At the very least we could have had 50 to 100 words were Taq had to talk, fight, or flee his way out of that situation.
Taq originally was going to do more but every time I tried to get him to do something it didn't seem to work. In the end despite his introduction there was very little truly about him. Considering i'd call myself more of a character writer this was an odd move for me. However, i'm not sure I could have done it as much justice if I had shown what Taq did.

Killer Angel said:
The hunger
At a certain point, i thought the story would have been a sort of nazi dystopia, with the killing of the weak to fortify the race. Then it quickly become a horror nightmare, with a sort of loverfcaftian wibe, especially strong in the finale part.
It's hard to believe that a great portion of the priest skinks turned themselves into a parody of cannibalism… I suppose that the explanation of why it was happening, lies in the "greenish rock once buried inside the plaque", that i read as a hint to a malevolent (and highly successful) plan made probably by skaven
If I'm reading it correctly, Taq killed all the mad priests, before the collapse of his own mind.
That was one of my misgivings as I wrote (but by that point it was a bit too late to go back.) I figured Lustrians would not be too adverse to eating their own dead and just tried to play with it a bit. Would Lustrians be so easily duped by a questionable plaque? Would the Slann have remained so unaware?

Whilst not revealed, I like to think it was something far darker and ancient than mere Skaven that was behind the corruption. As to what happened with Taq...heheheh...

Lord Agragax of Lunaxoatl[SIZE=4 said:
=][/SIZE]Story 2: An excellently chilling Warhammer parody of all those films where the protagonist discovers a terrifying cult and desperately tries to find his way out (e.g. the Wicker Man and Hot Fuzz). I agree with Killer Angel in that I think Taq slit the throats of all the flesh-eating priests and attempts to destroy the tablet that stated the word of the cult, although is driven mad in the process, perhaps by the killing of his fellow Lizardmen or by the radiation of the Warpstone in the tablet. Furthermore I love the double-meaning hinted at in the story - at first glance it looks as though the Skaven engineered the entire thing through the Warpstone tablet, but remember that there was also the long drought - in our world, early dinosaurs like Coelophysis often resorted to cannibalism to survive in the Triassic droughts, as they were some of the only creatures that didn't migrate during these dry seasons. It could be that the Warpstone tablet had nothing to do with the cult and that the cannibalism was caused by the famine produced by the drought. Another thing I like is the statement of the tablet being a little nod to the ancient Celtic custom of preserving an enemy's head for display - just as this cult believes that devouring the slain grants the eater a portion of their strength and wisdom, the Celts believed that displaying the head of an enemy meant that the warrior had taken that foe's soul for his own to empower himself.A brilliantly creepy, morbid piece that shouldn't be read after dark!
Thank you for the indepth reading, sir! :)

I also had the Kroot mindset of devouring selected foes in mind mixed with the historical idea. It felt fitting for the Lustrians. And it took me ages to get the image of bloody mawed Skinks feasting on a dead Slann from my mind...And now its back...great. :P

thedarkfourth said:
The Hunger

Our second course was a rich, steamy broth of dark delights, filled with visceral gristly bits of tension with strong undertones of grimly building horror. More of a cajun Lovecraftian gumbo than a Quebecois B-movie chowder. This dish thrived on its subtleties, holding back on the really explosive ingredients until our tastebuds had been sufficiently prepared by a journey of ever-escalating spice. The ultra-picante final scene, while hardly surprising or unexpected, was nonetheless satisfying for the well-structured delivery.

Taste: Eye-watering
Presentation: Understated
Ambience: Brooding à la crypt
★★★★★
I really loved the way you wrote your reviews. It was fun to write this sort of story.

Ratty Gnawtail said:
Story Two: When I chose this theme I knew there’d be cannibalism in at least one piece. This reader clearly enjoys Lovecraft or something of that sort. It was certainly an interesting take having it told by a nameless narrator partly through the eyes of our hero...who might have done something in the end? Gah! I know the whole mystery element works and that but c’mon, you could have let that Skink have one line of dialogue. Nonetheless, dark and gory, nice stuff!
So here's the kicker, Ratty, I have only read a couple of Lovecraft's stories and one of those he himself hated! I generally don't read much horror...which is a shame really. And yes, Taq maybe needed more.

Seer Sneer said:
Seer Sneer: I have nev-never understood why most of the lesser-weak races hate-hate the idea of eating each other. Personally Skaven meat despite us being the superior race...is less-less than ideal for one of my dishes. A little too lean and stringy unless specially fattened up or farmed. Whelp-flesh is tasty enough and the skin can be made into fine robes and gloves. Older Skaven meat is not worth time, just stick-stick to softer parts like eyes, brains, inner organs, and tongue.
They do make nice robes...erm...so I hear.

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